Officer Kaoko

Akai-kun, what's with tiny winy review ! How am I suppose to know if it's good or not of you just wrote 'not bad'! Hah!? I've been waiting for a nice-long review, and then you just give me two words of 'not bad'!? All I can figure out that this story is not bad in your eyes ! At least give me some nice opinion of what you think of this story! You came and say 'not bad'? Not bad my back !! Why am I feeling so ridiculous today ... It's all because of you...

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The Brutal Loss N/A: This is the edited version of the ‘Brutal Lost’. The editing and correcting was all done by a faithful and trustful friend of mine… Tacticwolf! She kindly accepted my humble offer to edit this respectful work. And she has done an amazingly good job… she has corrected my mistakes I had done, and added more details to the story. If you have read the one before this, then I suggest you read it again and tell us your opinion of this edited version. And then, another member kindly corrected my mistakes, her name is… HalfAngel! She was very good at explaining where my mistakes were and I learned from them a lot. Thank you @HalfAngel! You should be my English teacher (LOL) P.S. Thank you both so much! ~oOo~ Summary: Haahh~ just find out yourselves…! I warn you to have handkerchiefs with you, in case you might cry… Characters: Shiho Miyano, Hiroshi Agasa, Shinichi Kudo, Gin (only name mentioned), Perry (I don’t know him, just name mentioned), etc. Genre: Tragedy, Romance, Friendship, Hurt/comfort, Thrill, etc. ~oOo~ One Shot, part 1: Shiho’s confession and Shinichi’s last moments… Abandoned building – 10:35 PM The building exploded and flames quickly spread out to every corner. Shiho looked around desperately, waiting in great suspense for Shinichi to come back out, having gone into the building to pursue Gin and Perry. Shiho couldn’t wait any longer. Her feet began to move on towards the building to check on Kudo, as if they had a mind of their own. “No, it’s dangerous!” shouted Professor Agasa as he grabbed her arm, preventing her from taking another step. “But Kudo-kun is still in there!” cried Shiho. “Shinichi-kun would manage to get away somehow,” he said, grief hanging on every word. He wanted to believe his words, but he himself didn’t trust what he was saying. He had been told by Shinichi not to enter the building no matter what happens. “Even if anything were to happen to me, you must get away from here. Whatever happens, don’t ever step inside the building… no matter what…! And prevent Haibara from doing anything stupid.” “But, he’ll die!” she yelled at Agasa. “They couldn’t rid of him that easily… I know him…” he said nervously. Agasa was worried too. He wanted to check on him, but he couldn’t leave Ai-kun alone. He took out his cell-phone and dialled the police headquarters. As Agasa turned his head to another direction, ignoring Agasa’s warnings, Shiho ran towards the building. Her heart beat fast; her breaths were coming in quick and rapid gasps, her eyes widened. She had a bad feeling; as if something was going to happen. The flames roared and licked the sides of the building as it grew bigger. Shiho tried to find an entrance in the mass of flames. Noticing a small gap in between walls, she moved carefully towards it, trying to avoid the flames. She surveyed her surroundings. There was only fire and flames spreading fiercely… nothing else, but smokes and ashes. Shiho coughed as she choked on some smoke… her eyes went red. She covered her nose and mouth with her arm. She began her search throughout the building. She broke into one of the rooms, but nothing but flames were found. Entering the second door she found more of the blazing fire and murky smoke, swarming fiercely and trying to take her in. One room after another, she found nothing, nothing but more flames… Then she heard something. Her heart did a flip inside her chest. What is it? The sound of loud breathing, grunting and coughing reached her ears. It had to be a person; nothing else could be inside the building except a person. She could only wonder… Could it possibly be him? Could it? The sound took place at the end of the corridor. It came from a room, not yet completely engulfed in flames. Her vision had gotten a bit blurry, but she still managed to run. She ran towards the room, flames almost lighting the rims of her shirt aflame. She prayed… she panted… she ran… until she reached the room with the voice. Nervously she entered. It was dead silent except for the crackling of the flames. The fire still didn’t reach its way through this room. Leaning against the wall, a teenage boy sat there breathing rapidly. Blood was running down his face. His clothes were covered with blood and dirt. His eyes were swollen. His body leaned helplessly against the wall. He gripped the left side of his stomach, blood pouring down over his hands. Sweat beaded his forehead as his face was twisting in pain. “Kudo-kun!” yelled Shiho as she recognized his face. She ran towards him, her face stricken with worry and fear. She held him in her arms, “Kudo-kun, are you alright?” she cried, “Kudo-kun!” “Ha- Haibara…” Shinichi muttered, “Why… are you here? I… told you—” “I-idiot!” she shouted at him, “Look what’s happened to you! You put yourself in danger and now look what happened…! You had no idea how worried we were…” “I- I’m sorry…” he croaked, “I was careless… they got me…” he said regretfully, “anyway, it’s dangerous here… hu-hurry up and get out of here while you can…” he coughed out blood, breathing in some air before finishing up his sentence, “You can still… make it…” “I’ll not go without you…” she said, “I’ll get you out of here… the professor had probably called the ambulance and the police… I—“ “No…” Shinichi murmured, “I’m dying…” he said with a bitter smile on his face, his swollen eyes closed, “they’ve got me in my vital organs… I know… I can feel it… I- will… never make it…” his voice fainted away for a moment. Shiho’s eye widened, her face looked so pale… she stared at Kudo, her eyes filled with terror and worries. “Now, go!” he told her tonelessly. He let go of her, forcing her to drop him. “N-no…” she said stubbornly, “you are coming with me…!” “… I told you already, didn’t I!?” he croaked desperately at Shiho, “I will die here…! And… that’s… final…!” he said, coughing. More blood came out. Before Shinichi could realize what was going on, Shiho took his left arm and placed it around her neck, and she put her right arm around his waist. Standing up, she helped pull Shinichi to his feet. “What are you—“ “I will not listen to your nonsense any longer,” she told him, she didn’t look at him, “I will- not let you die…” she muttered. The Flames grew wilder and began to enter the room. “Drop me…!” he whispered harshly at her, “I’m done here… *cough*… you will not make it out while I’m with you…! *cough* *cough* cough*!!” “Once… a proud detective told me…” She said to him, with a gentle and quite tone, “to never run away from my destiny… and I was stuck to those words… So you shouldn’t easily give up yourself… I have faith that one day, you will bring down the syndicate… you are the only one who can avenge Ran and my sister…” she then started forward, “I believe in you… I always did… you saved me from the darkness I was in… you changed me, your smile saved me… so I’m not afraid to die protecting you… because…” she swallowed hard, “…I- Love you…” Shinichi’s eyes grew wide as he heard Shiho’s last words. He was speechless. He thought he knew her well, but she loved him all this time. “We are partners, aren’t we?” she reminded him, “either we survive together, or die together.” She then began to move. The door she’d come in through was useless now, as the flames had already destroyed it. It spread itself fiercely out as it covered almost of the room. Shiho began to cough. Smoke were scattering everywhere now, making it hard to breathe and hard to see. “Hang in there!” Shiho told Shinichi, who began to cough from the large amount of smoke. She shook herself and then turned around. There was another door behind them. She sprinted to the door while dragging Shinichi. She wasn’t able to run because she was carrying him with her. So she tried to walk instead. She found it hard, because she was trying to avoid opening Shinichi’s wound at the same time. If she walked slowly the flames might catch up with them. But if she tried to walk faster, she might rip Shinichi’s injuries. Both options are risky. Shinichi watched Shiho hesitate; he knew she would never let him go. “Don’t worry about me…” Shinichi pleaded, “I- I’ll be- *cough* I’ll be just fine… *cough*! Hu- hurry…! Or the fire… will catch up… to us…” “O-okay…” Shiho nodded, not knowing what else to say. She hurriedly walked through the hall. More flames, more fire, more smoke, more ashes… All she could do was keep walking, preventing any fire reaching them. Shinichi was feeling more restless than ever. His wounds were hurting him like nightmare. His pulse was beating like crazy. His heart was pounding fiercely. His body had gone numb. Light was slowly fading from his eyes… “We will definitely make it,” soft words came out of Shiho’s mouth. “So, please just hang in a little…” Shinichi looked at Shiho with his dim eyes. Shiho was trying her best to get out of the place with him alive. “We’ll get out of here,” she kept saying, “and once you’ve recovered, we’ll pursue them again… but next time…” she said softly. And then she turned to him, “we’ll do it together…” As Shinichi was about to react, a large piece of wood with fire broke off and threw itself in their direction. Shiho didn’t notice till Shinichi grabbed her and jumped out of the way. “What-” Shiho was shocked by the sudden action. She didn’t realize anything till she was thrown out of the way. She looked at Shinichi where he lay. He was groaning in pain. “Kudo-kun!” she rushed to his aid, “Are you alright?” “Y- Yeah…” Shinichi croaked, “some-somehow… at least… I’m s-still alive…” he smiled weakly. “Anyway, the situation has gotten pretty serious now,” Shiho said, helping Shinichi up, “we must get out of here as soon as possible.” It was true, she could see fire and flames scattering around them like mad. It had gotten very hot. Smokes had gathered itself around them. Everything went blurry. What shall I do now? Shiho thought. She was desperate, if only she could get Shinichi out of here. “Go- go to the… left…” panted Shinichi, “its… clear…” Without a second thought, Shiho rushed to the direction Shinichi pointed. She walked and walked… more flames… more smokes… everything almost caught up with them. Shinichi felt like he could pass out any moment. It was entirely filled with flames and fire and smoke, but then… Shiho gasped as she was something from a far distance… it was a glimpse of the outside light! “We are almost there…” gasped Shiho to Shinichi. Who was coughing out smoke and struggling to breathe. Shiho walked as fast as she could, trying her best to ignore the fire, but it was difficult… some flames almost caught up to her clothes. The exit was getting nearer. Shiho was desperate. But as soon as they was about to reach the exit, Shinichi felt something… it was his detective instinct. He could hear a crack… a sound only he could hear… something was strange… Krrrkk…! What was it? The noise made him nervous… Clak! If only he could identify where it came from… Thuk… crrrrk… “Look! *cough*cough*” exclaimed Shiho, “we are almost there *cough*cough*!” It was only a few paces away. Even Shiho was feeling uneasy now. She had inhaled too much smoke. But she was delighted somehow knowing that they would soon be out. She struggled as she sped up her step. “Crack!” snapped the sound. Shinichi noticed it this time… very clearly indeed. He glanced up to the ceilings. Yes… it came from the ceiling! The ceiling looks like it was about to collapse any moment now… crack… snap! The pillar supporting its roof was cracking, making itself to bend in a weird direction. Crap…! It’s going to fall on us, thought Shinichi weakly. They were almost there… Shiho was exhausted as her step became slower and weaker. She panted and was craving for clean air. She too felt like she’s going to pass out at any moment. Shinichi was worrying about the ceiling as it looked as if it was going to fall off any second. Now everything became slow… it might have even seemed like the slowest moments in Shinichi’s life. “Thank you… Haibara…” Shinichi croak-whispered in Shiho’s ear, “and… forgive me…” Snap! Without a moment of hesitation, Shinichi took a grip of Shiho’s waist… “What are you—“ Before Shiho could stop him, Shinichi, with his last bit of strength, threw Shiho out from the building’s entrance. And that was when the most tragic moment happened… the ceiling making its last snap, collapsing suddenly… Shinichi was taking in his last breaths, standing there with a sad look on his face. He smiled bitterly at Shiho, who was just getting back some of her senses, as she glanced over to the collapsing building. Shiho’s face was so pale, her eyes growing wider and wider as the collapsing building was falling un-relentlessly on the boy who she wanted to protect the most. Waruina… Haibara… Shinichi glanced at Shiho for the last time… as the flames were falling fiercely at his useless body, I didn’t notice till now… how you felt about me… You were a faithful partner… Thank you for everything… Shiho ran towards the location to help out Shinichi… but it was of too late now… Shinichi’s body had already been buried in flames and the building’s wreckage… flames were roaring brutally, like telling her it will swallow her if she went there. The last thing Shinichi felt was searing pain all over his body, yet he no longer cared. He wished he could have been there to still support Shiho, but he was happy to finally be reunited with Ran. A small smile played on his lips, before he was consumed completely by the fire and his life was taken from his body. Farewell… Haibara… echoed the final voice of Shinichi’s thoughts… I leave everything to you… “NO!” cried Shiho, tears covering her eyes… she slowed down her pace… and she soon fell to the ground… unconscious… ~oOo~ “I found a young lady over here!” yelled a man. It was a fire-fighter. “I think she’s just unconscious… she has some minor injuries though! Hurry, bring the stretcher!” “Ai-kun!” Professor Agasa ran towards Shiho worriedly. “Take out the fire there,” said one of the men, pointing at the location where Shinichi was buried. “I- I found a lad!” said one of the men. He helped the lifeless teenage boy out of the wreckage. “How is he?” The man shook his head in disappointment, a cringe appearing on his face, “… he’s gone…” ~oOo~ A/N: 50% credits goes on me... and another half all goes for HalfAngel and Kiel ... Thank you so much ladies for kindly editing my work! I hope you continue to enjoy my stories... Credits Disclaimer: I don't own Detective Conan, all characters here belongs to its respective author... Gosho Aoyama. Author of this Fan-Fic: Editors: @kiel & @HalfAngel Original Author of this story: Gosho Aoyama.

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Why don't you just simply follow up to my review ! Akai-kun, you may have said too much (I was the one who actually said too much )! I follow up to my own review and that's how I view my opinions ! Hehehehe, I'm just so awesome And don't say anything till Tacticwolf-chan sees this! You are out ! I feel so bad just now...

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Have you noticed the similaraties between Magic Kaito and Detective Conan? 1. Ginzo Nakamori and Kogoro Mouri: • They both looked alike (beside the hairstyles [and their moustache style]). • They both have somewhat similar second name 'Nakamori', 'Mouri'. • And they both have daughters that looked identical to each (except the hairstyles). • Both had someway related to the police: Kogoro use to be a police officer - Ginzo is an inspector. 2. The Pairings: • Akako Koizumi [cool type (Megumi Hayashibara)]-> Kaito [protagonist (Kappei Yamaguchi)]-> LOVE <-Aoko [similar look to Ran]<-Saguru [Looks a bit similar to *below*] • Shiho Miyano [cool type (cast: Megumi Hayashibara)]-> Shinichi [protagonist (Kappei Yamaguchi)]-> LOVE <-Ran [similar look to Aoko]<-(?) Dr. Araide [Looks a bit smilar to *above*]/ Eisuke Hondou 3. Akako Koizumi and Shiho Miyano: • Both mature (Akako [not really]) and cool types... • And both of them are somewhat... EVIL...! Shiho: Ex member of the Black Organization - Akako: Witch. • Both of them had someway to do with poisons... Shiho: APTX4869 - Akako: Liquids and witch's ingridients. • Share the same seiyu (Megumi Hayashibara). • Both had no parents... I don't know about Akako, really... but they did not show she had any... • Akako had feelings for the protagonist (Magic Kaito), Kaito Kuroba... while Shiho had feelings for the protagonist (Detective Conan), Shinichi Kudo. And both protagonists (Shinichi and Kaito) share the same seiyu as well (Kappei Yamaguchi). • Both are loyal to the protagonists (of each manga). • I don't know how to say it, but... Shiho and Agasa... Akako and the evil butler... someway similar... 4. Ran Mouri and Aoko Nakamori: • They looked identical, except for the hairstyles. • They both know fighting skills: Ran with her Karate, Akako with... mops and fish (fish only to Kaito). • Both scared of ghosts... (Really? Kaoko...uhm! I mean Aoko...) • Their father had someway to do with the poice... Kogoro Mouri: Ex police officer. Ginzo Nakamori: Inspector. • Both their fathers looked somehow similar (look above), identical to be more precise. • Both Ran and Aoko have love interest with the protgonist: Ran -> Shinichi. - Aoko -> Kaito. Whom again share the same seiyu: Kappei Yamaguchi. 5. Shinichi Kudo and Kaito Kuroba: • Both are protagonist... • Both looked so identical, except for the hairstyles. • Share the same seiyu: Kappei Yamaguchi. • Both had old man as their partners (or rather assistance) which in some kind of way are similar: Shinichi Kudo - Hiroshi Agasa. Kaito Kuroba - Konosuke Jii. • Both have love interests with their childhood friends (look above)... ahh, okay, okay! Shinichi Kudo - Ran Mouri. Kaito Kuroba - Aoko Nakamori. • Both their fathers are famous: Yusaku Kudo as a famous mysery novelist, while Toichi Kuroba is a famous gentlemen thief (or rather, a famous magician). • Both Shinichi and Kaito are similar to their father: Toichi used to be a unbeatable oppenent for Yusaku... and now for the second generation: Kaito is an unbeatable oppenent for Shinichi... (I wrote it rather lame there...) • Both are rather popular in their school: Kaito with his magic, and Shinichi as a famous high school detective. • Both had an 'organization' to deal with: Kaito and Snake... Shinichi and the Black Organization. • Both have secret indentities. Shinichi Kudo -> (secret [same person]) Conan Edogawa. Kaito Kuroba -> (secret [same person]) Kaitou Kid. • Both are targeted. • Both are famous. • Both are clever... and both of them are very... sly...! • Both are rather popular with girls. • Each have a well known unskilled-something: Shinichi - deaf tone... Kaito - very sucks at skating. Haha, I hope you all enjoyed reading this 'useless' list...!

By the way, that doushinji you mentioned in the podcast, I’m really so curious, what IS IT!? Can you show it to us (or rather share it with us), please~ ? P.S. And thank you very much for mentioning and remembering my name... I was surprised for a second there… thank you CarpetCrawler-san! I owe you one! …THANKS AGAIN!

Anyway, you guys were totally awesome! I like the way how you folks talked about Detective Conan, and how the first time you’ve seen the series, how you got hooked into the show, and how you’ve become crazy fans ! Really, it was just so cool! And Carpet-san, is your brother a fan of Detective Conan? I guess the answer would be ‘no’, hehehe, my sixth sense… And… umm… I really liked the MegureXAgasa pairings (Heck no!)… I would like to uhm… suggest some topic ideas if you don’t mind. It is just some suggestions; I wouldn’t be upset or anything if it weren’t taken. What about discussing some unsolved mystery in Detective Conan ? Like: • Shuuichi Akai’s Death Theory: Is Akai-san really dead? If he was still alive how’d he got away from the incident? And if he is really dead, then who is the Scar Akai? • Okiya Subaru: Do you really think that Okiya Subaru is a member of the Black Organization? And some people think that he is actually Akai in disguise… • The Secret behind Vermouth’s Youth: What’s the secret behind Vermouth’s youth? Masaka… APTX4869!?? • The connection between Gin and Sherry: What’s the connection between Sherry and Gin? Could it be… could it be… her real father?! • The connection between Haibara and Akai Shuuichi: Nah… I don’t know… Or talk about members in DCW and DCTP... I’m sure that will get everyone (here) hooked . Haha! Or talk about Gosho’s life and history, how he became an artist and all that? Some of Detective Conan fan I know, they don’t even know DC author’s name is! They just watch and read having no idea who made it! Or… umm… your favourite characters in Detective Conan… And why you like them and stuff… And umm… talk about your (CarpetCrawler, Southpaw, Skye-chan, etc.) hobbies, habits, what do you do in free times, your talents, your careers, etc. Hah~ I’ll suggest more ideas later when I have some lamp-pops in my head~ Jaa naa!

Comment for the second episode of DCW Podcast: I just listened to DCW Podcast ep 02. And it was… AWESOME! But before that, I would like to point out something… from episode 1 of the podcast; I actually mistook Southpaw for CarperCrawler…! …Uhm! I mean I mistook Skye-chan for Southpaw! Oh my god, I’m so sorry! I was going to edit my feedback up there, but it’s too late since I think you’ve already read it. I really thought that Southpaw was Skye-chan, because I ridiculously thought that the moderators would speak the most… and I wasn’t really paying attention at the first bit (when you were introducing yourselves), oh my goodness… I’m so ridiculous… Ehhh *sigh*¬ I’m so sorry Southpaw-chan and Skye-chan (I know that you wouldn’t have minded anyway)… so sorry, I beg you the humblest apology… Forgive me…! I didn’t mean to be rude… please forgive me…! *sob**sob*

Ehehehe , sorry! Oh, and I wasn’t serious too when I ‘yelled’ at you~ It was just a little joke…! I knew that you weren’t serious, I only said that to… uhm! Yeah, I just like playing around sometimes¬ Ohohohohoho !

Uhm! Hello there¬ sorry for my late reply. The connection had been cut off again (Internet-Wire Thieves again!). And my PC charger had been broken, so I’m using my mom’s PC, and I’m not very comfortable here. Anyway… Bye-bye ! Wait, I’m just kidding! Okay let’s begin with reviewing your awesome story : Wow, this story is amazing; I’ve got to admit that this is much better than your other one! And thank goodness that you separate the chapters. Like your other fan-fic I was like… I couldn’t finish the entire story in one day (because I’m busy somehow), so I decided I’ll read it bit by bit. And then when I was about to continue the story the other day, I was like… “Where on earth am I up to now!” and so… I don’t know and then I discontinued reading it… sorry! I’m glad you divide this in chapters. Wow! Your writing skills are awesome; I wish I could write like you ! I’ve read 3 chapters so far, and I decided to give each chapter its review, so I wouldn’t spoil anything for the readers. Okay, it was very amusing how you made Agasa’s house a resting place for the FBI, haha! Hattori is there too? Nice! In this fan-fic I think you’ve made Haibara-san a bit out of character here, like… uhm! Its dramatic how’ve you made Haibara there… but, I think somehow… it’s unusual for her to be feeling sad like that (I don’t know how to express it by words XD)... and then when Akai-san (wait, is he still alive?) approached her and whispered to her, “You love him,” I think that’s when Akai is totally out of his character (right, Shuuichi Akai (from DCW)?)! I think it’d be better if you made Jodie take that role. And with Shiho’s character, I think she would more likely deny the fact that she likes Kudo. Like this (in my humble opinion): “You love him,” whispered a voice. Ai spun around after pulling on her mask. “Jodie-sensei...!” she muttered, “I- It’s nothing like that…!” she said as she turned her blushing face aside. Jodie smiled at the little girl… her and her love for ‘cool guy’… it’s so romantic… just like in the movies! (LOL! Please don’t take this part seriously… I was half-kidding !) And about Akai-san, it’d be more dramatic if you made Haibara still hated him… like… she couldn’t forgive Akai for using her sister, Akemi Miyano to get the information on the syndicate by pretending to be her boyfriend, and then leading her to her own death. Haibara must ignore eye contact with him, and hate him that she doesn’t even want to be in the same room with the person who tricked her beloved sister! Hahaha, I would have preferred it that way though, yohohoho! And wait, Shuuichi preparing breakfast??!! Mmm…I think you’ve made a mistake here: Hattori poked Shinichi in the ribs and whispered, “Kudo-kun, you’ve got company.” Heiji doesn’t use name suffixes with Shinichi. He calls him just by ‘Kudo’. It made me laugh once how Heiji referred to Haibara as ‘Ano chichai onee-chan (that little lady)’, Ahahaha! It was so funny! Oh, and add ‘Oi’ before ‘Kudo’… no reason… Ohohoho ! Okay… now for the next chapter !

Okay, I read it and PHEW! As Tacticwolf-chan said, you didn’t organize the thing when the characters saying their lines, you don’t put them between “”. So it’s somehow kind of annoying … but I can understand which characters are talking. So I had no problem with that. And the characters are someway out of their personality. It’s hard to explain but… just a piece of advice, when you want to write, you have to put your soul inside their skin and suggest what the characters would do in the following situation . For example, Sonoko… when Ran and Shinichi met and were acting kind of lovy-dovy stuff … Sonoko wouldn’t have stayed silent, she would have teased them. And Shinichi wouldn’t have invited Ran in front of Sonoko. I think he would have at least whispered to her instead of saying it out loud. Uhm! I have a lot to say but… I’m too lazy to list it all down! But actually, despite the plot your English is quite amazing (for having English as the second language )! There are some grammatical errors, but its okay since I screw up too in my Fan-Fic sometimes I think you had rush in writing this Fan-Fic. For your readers to enjoy your story, you must take your time and do it smoothly without hurry . And then when you finish writing your story, reread it again and examine every single word and think how your readers would feel and think when they read it themselves (would they enjoy it this way? Would they find this interesting? Will they get hooked? Etc.). I like some of your way of writing, and hahaha, the code really excited me for a second there! Cool! And nice thinking! I hope my review wasn’t too much. But I like you compare to other Fan-Fiction-Authors… since most of them mostly write nasty and dirty stuffs . When you write another Fan-Fic, I will be delighted to read them! So I can tell you what I think again ! Good luck ! And please do not consider me rude or anything… I’m just being honest here 