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This = <3 Mysterious Benedict Society (again)

Music, fanfics, and AMVs.

I don't know.

I feel kinda lost.

I like Simple Plan. <3

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Scar Akai is back(finally!)! Quite a development and can't wait to see what will happen. Though Sera blushing when thinking about Amuro is... -__-

=X Say, where'd Mark go? :/

Agreed. <3333 But... obv. much, Yohan?

Dear Anonymous, What happened to the time when we were friends? You may still think we're friends, but let me tell you. This isn't how I'd like my friends to act. It feels like all you did was use me. When I helped you off the ground you at first seemed thankful. Now it seems like you're walking away while laughing at me. What happened to our friendship? Was it worthless to you? Was my help just a rope to get you off the cliff so that you could push me down? I thought you were better than that. I really, truly did. ~ Anonymous Dear Anonymous, Why do I miss you so much? ~ Jean

Tomorrow is the Last Time Or I think that's what it's called.

Parkur! ;_____________;

=X Is DCTP down or is it just me?

=X ... *feels bad* Fine, yes.

=X No.

Photoshop, MasterChef, AMV making, laughing at DC live action, etc.

It's sweet, that I'll give it. What it's lacking right now is a whole lot more description. The story ended too quickly and too soon. You need to input more emotion, not just the occasional "glimmer of tears" or stuff like that. Dialogue is very important in a story, it's something I use a lot, but without description, it's useless. Another comment I had is it is a little OOC for Ran to pour out her emotions so easily. She's the type who would hide it and smile. If you had this development later on in the story, it would work. Third, at the beginning you said *Mouri Tantei Agency*. This, in writing, is generally discouraged. Try to fit that in with a describing sentence. I also suggest you have a better introductory sentence to catch our attention. Other than that, good job!