Overall, a generally good attempt at Shinichi for a first-timer- I'm neutral towards the storyline that goes beside it, though. (I'm ShinRan)
Open the spoiler box for a more 'critical' comment. Don't take any offence, please ^-^.
Well, that's all I can say ^-^! I hope you continue drawing and improve as you go on then~
Here's some candy as compensation for reading through my rant *gives candy*