Kiel95

hahaha, nah, i haven't really written one i mean, i could if i had the time, but recently (as i've stated in some other place that i can't remember) i'm currently working on non fanfics which are romances... but if i have time and you'd really like, i can do a sequel, just lemme know

i suggest using notepad... it works better for copying and pasting onto this forum (well, at least for me )

i was going to continue reading, but the mashed together paragraphs are quite an eyesore >.<' I would def like it to be shinshi/aicon... it's better ot me... and anyways... i just don't know how i view this story as of right now... its ok... but... i dunno... just not the sort of thing i'd like to read... i want to read it to give feedback... but i mean, i just got a headache from trying to unmash the paragraphs, and now its going to be hard to go to sleep... its just... not a good time... please, when you add another chapter, dont mash together the paragraphs.. i'll read it then... otherwise, i don't know if i can keep reading this story... sorry... well, good luck on writing, and i hope you choose aicon since it's a much more interestig couple <3

ok well, there are definitely a few grammatical errors which made the story slightly confusing, but i think i was able to get the outline ok <3 can't wait to read more

i'm starting to like you oh shinshi/aicon fan <3 MORE ROMANCE FOR SHINICHI AND SHIHO <3

ok, i'm sorry, i'm not a huge fan of this style, where it's like a script in a play... and i'm not a fan of the coupling... as previously stated, grammar is not that great, and if more time was spent on it i think you'd do fine... but i feel as if you rushed the story, like you were just slapping it together and throwing it online... i dunno, it just... doesn't feel proper to me... since someone has already offered to give advice, i won't (unless asked) and truthfully, for a shinran story... i just.... don't think i'd want to help write it... i mean, i can give ideas and edit and such... but writing a shinran is... torture for me... if i'm to write a shinran, i'll always write an alternate ending so that i won't kill myself after finishing the story... anyways... the story seems to be interesting from everything i've read so far, but unless the grammar and style of writing changes, i don't know if i'll continue... anyways, good luck, and i'll be back sometime to check this out, and i'll decide then whethere i continue to read or not. I wish you the best ~Kiel

hahaha, i'm glad <3 but i mean, the meanest reviewers are the authors themselves... sometimes i go back to read what i've written, and holy s*** i HATED my style of writing when i wrote that... i'm definitely thinking of editing it.. cuz that version right now is making me mad >w< so if i get the time i'll edit it... but recently i've been straying from fanfics and moving on to romances and such... god... i'm so pathetic... i mean, i'm a COMPLETE HOPELESS ROMANTIC... but i don't believe there's a thing such as true love (ironic no?)... man i want to, but seriously, love can be considered overrated... love doesn't last forever... friendship might, but lovers at one point will grow apart to when they are either completely against each other, acquaintences, or friends... only true love exists when two people love each other forever, and i've never seen it exist... sure there is a FORM of true love... but that's a different kind... its like when two people are madly in love at a point, and one of them passes away... that moment where the two were actually 'in love' is the peak of their romance, and also the end, so it would be the memory remembered... oh geez... i'm given a friggin speech here... anyways, i love you're work, i feel like killing shinichi, and i hope ai-chan the best <3 good luck on your next works! <3<3<3 (i've already forgotten how i got off topic and i'm too lazy to go back and read what i've written XD yippeeee <3)

<3 thanks for making them kiss <3 even if they aren't 'in love' yet... <3 <3 <3 <3 <3 <3 <3 <3 <3 <3 <3 quite a few grammatical errors, but i understood the story ^^ i liked it

hahaha, thanks

what a bland response sine it's a fanfic, their personalities usually will be, as a fanfic is usually something that would not happen in the series, so we as fans have to try to fit the personality to the story, when in the actual series, something may not have happened yet to show us how the character would react to it

hahahahaha XDDD <3<3<3 but you're a really good writer! i suck >w<

why thank you if shinichi is going to harm my ai-chan, i'm going to harm him >=D

yaaay aicon <3

oh geez... it was a sort of conai and a shinran.. i'm actually crying... damn you shinichi you lying f****** b******!!!!!!!!!!!!!! i may be a conai but if you had said waht you did to haibara and were real, i would've killed you and then NOBODY WOULD EVER KNOW, AS THE GREAT KUDO SHINICHI WOULD BE DEAD!!!!!

its not gonna be aimi who's the bad one, its gonna be hitomi, just you wait and see!!! wait.. you already know XD anyways, its goin pretty good... oh yeah, and were you going to like make it a conai in the end or shinran? depending on which may determine how interested i stay.. and yes, post more, more more, but do so in less... like since some of your chapters are short, combine the short chapters with the one after or before... that way there aren't too many new threads, and we don't have to go to each one.. or you could put a link to the rest of the chapters, so that you don't have to repost it here... but yes, i would like to continue reading aaaaaall of part 1