Kiel95
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maybe XD point out the confusing part and i'll try to explain (umm don't say the whole thing... i'll have to shoot you then XD)
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umm.... too confusing nothing makes sense
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thnk you <3
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ok then, good luck! i can't wait to read more! haha, i guess i just reaaaaally want conan to end up with ai! i look for even teh minute details of a story for little hints of a persons feelings for another... especially tween my fav couple! anything that has to do with conan and ai, well be sure that i'll probably some sort of romance behind it, even if it wasn't intended its just me and my dreaming! anyways, can't wait for the next part!
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sorry if it was somewhat confusing >w< i tried my best to make it easy to understand... if you read it over again, ususally u'd understand it cuz you notice more and you've had more time to digest the info
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thnx ^^ you must be a shinran fan since i don't think you've read the shihoxshinichi one yet... or was it aicon... well its been a while since i read my own story so i can't even remember XD
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kyaaaa write more write more!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! make it an aicon/shinshi love story as well as a story where they are escaping from the clutches of the syndicate XDD
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hell yeah i'm waiting for the next chap! add the black org and some lil romance tween haibara and conan and i'll be happy ^^ but, whether you do or don't, i cant wait!
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pretty good ^^ personally tho, i think you need to cut down on the snickering and sudden mood changes... it goes from light hearted to someone glaring too often.... and they get shocked too much... they can't get shocked every time... like, for once, they should analyze the situation calmly, and explain things slsowly... most of us teen writers, and some adult writers, tend to just throw everything we got out there in one blow... we need to lengthen it some (don't worry, i do the same) i hate to put pauses in because i fear i'll forget... but when i go back, i can change it up and add the pauses i previously couldnt...anyways, just a suggestion ^^ can't wait to read more! you ever need help with somethin, don't hesitate to ask, if i got the time, i'll do my best!
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just keep writing, writing, writing, and write on and on and make a lil aicon romance yaaaaay~ i definitely will keep reading! (though, of course, i can't love it as much as normal fanfics sowwy TT-TT)
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pretty good ^^ thro in some aicon *phweeeet*
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is ok... as long as you help pair conan and ai up, i'll def keep reading! (usually i don't like when stories mix a person from reality in... i dunno, they just bug me, but if in the story you help conan and ai get together, i'll be fine with it ^^)
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well, the whole story... it seems to be mainly dialogue... and most of the people.. are people that aren't in the actual series, not only that, but there isn't much of a setting right now, and so i'm confused who the people are, and where they are... also, the dialogue isn't easy to understand either...
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s-sorry, i don't get it... i tryied to read it... but i got so confused...
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you better >.< you can't be officially nicnamed Ginseng if you've never tried it before XD
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even though i'm not on as often as i used to be, i usually still notice when someone hasn't been on in a while! XD oh yeah, have you had a chance to buy ginseng tea yet? It's good ^^ -
Good Luck! can't wait to read more! d(^^)b
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good ^^ if you liked, i'll edit it... i like editing stories, especially conai/shinshi stories! It's much quicker than writing my own since i don't have to think up a plot and such ^^ well anywyas, just tell me what i can do to help and i'll do my best! (i don't mean to be rude, but there are many grammatical errors as well as plot holes... for one thing, are they at the detective agency? Why wasn't ran suspicious about seeing the cat? and the very last few lines "I'm done" and If only the image of the girl in the dream troubled him, this would not let him sleep up in 1 week- do you mean Ai says I'm done, as if she finished the pill? Is that only his hallucination? and the image... did you mean 'If only the image of the small strawberry blonde girl hadn't troubled him, and if only this waking nightmare hadn't happened, he would have been able to sleep easily for the next week. That wasn't the case. It had happened, and it had troubled him, and he couldn't sleep well for the next week.'- is that sort of what you meant?)
