Shiho's tragedy ! Part 1

[Aeyra]

Uhm, her name is Shizumi... Uh...

I love how you can't remember the name... XD

[hopes]

Sorry... The name of the story is "Of Childhood Friend and Girlfriend".

It's really good. Essentially, it's about Kaito having a girlfriend and Aoko getting jealous... And the girlfriend is none other than... SHIN-CHAN~!! So yes, this is a gender-bent fic. But I like it. <3

[Aeyra]

Sorry... The name of the story is "Of Childhood Friend and Girlfriend".

It's really good. Essentially, it's about Kaito having a girlfriend and Aoko getting jealous... And the girlfriend is none other than... SHIN-CHAN~!! So yes, this is a gender-bent fic. But I like it. <3

I'd prefer shounen-ai, but it sounds okay. I'm not too into this gender-bent stuff. What's the author's name though?

[Amaranth]

Shimizu Hikaru. I'd neeeeeeeeeeeeeeever forget that name. *person who is totally addicted to genderbent KaiShin*

[Aeyra]

I still prefer shounen-Ai... One reason being it irks me when characters aren't the gender they're supposed to be, the second being most names aren't gender-interchangeable(this really annoys me for some reason) and the third being that I just don't like a boy as a girl or vice versa. Body-switch or antidote-just-so-happened to turn character into the different gender is okay, but I don't like genderbend outside fanart. Oh, I read the story though. While it's interesting in it's own way, it didn't grab my attention. And there are a couple typos/grammar errors, but I ignored those.

[hopes]

Exactly. So that's why I volunteered to beta.

So far... There's a lot of errors. Shimiza Hikaru likes to use 'him' and 'her' and not use detail a lot...

[Aeyra]

Exactly. So that's why I volunteered to beta.

So far... There's a lot of errors. Shimiza Hikaru likes to use 'him' and 'her' and not use detail a lot...

I noticed... But him and her work well...

[hopes]

I know, but she never uses their actual NAMES.

[Aeyra]

I know, but she never uses their actual NAMES.

As long as you don't get confused on who she's talking about, it's perfectly fine. Using names too often is a huge annoyance for me. 'He' 'she' 'him' and 'her' are a lot simpler. Pronouns were invented for a reason. (but using the name every once in a while is good for effect. )

[hopes]

EXACTLY.

[Aeyra]

What? It's confusing? When I read it through, it seemed fine, but I guess I wasn't really paying attention...

[Amaranth]

I wasn't confused

[hopes]

No, no!! The last part.

[Amaranth]

Okay, well I guess I wasn't paying attention. I simply skimmed through it. But this story I'm trying to make sense of is really confusing me... *Sigh*

[Aeyra]

@Chelsea I don't think I read that far seeing I didn't like the idea much. I do envy her update speed though... But warn her not to make Shinichi's full name Shinichi. Because that's a boy's name. (its like naming a girl Jimmy. :3 XD) Tell her to try Shinko or something.

PS, I'll read it again to check. :3 And Chels, would you be willing to just look over chapters (the HP fic) before I post them? Just some feedback. Or do you think I should just post it on DCW for feedback?

@Nobody-What story?

ADDED ON LATER: @Chelsea: It looks perfectly fine to me. Just minor typos really. The 'him' and 'her' are completely unnoticeable, and names are used plenty. I never lost track of who and what and whatever. It's reasonably detailed, not amazing, but there's enough to envision what's going on pretty clearly. If I were betaing it, there wouldn't be much I'd touch up on- just a not mire detail and typos. I dont think tons of detail is her style.

[Amaranth]

@Chels: Yeah, Shinko seems to be what everyone calls Fem!Shinichis.

@Aeyra: Oh, it's a story that someone wrote about some members in DCW (and is not related in any way to DC itself). And maybe you should post on DCW for feedback...

[IdentityUnknown]

@Aeyra: Oh, it's a story that someone wrote about some members in DCW (and is not related in any way to DC itself). And maybe you should post on DCW for feedback...

Really? What's it called?

[Amaranth]

Shhhh... (whispers)that's a secret

[IdentityUnknown]

Shhhh... (whispers)that's a secret

;____________; Twin, how could you? ;______________; I thought we were sisters! ;_______________;

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[OldJustal]

If you're the twin of my clone which means i'm your twin sisters clone ... ??

[Amaranth]

;____________; Twin, how could you? ;______________; I thought we were sisters! ;_______________;

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Waaaaah!!! Well, maybe you can ask KKLT for a copy after I PM her.

If you're the twin of my clone which means i'm your twin sisters clone ... ??

Good point, CyCLONE! Yay for genderbent clones!

[IdentityUnknown]

Waaaaah!!! Well, maybe you can ask KKLT for a copy after I PM her.

*waits impatiently*

[Amaranth]

*waits impatiently*

Sorry, Twin, but author won't let me send it to you. =__=

[hopes]

Ohhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh.... Well, I knew that, but still. :/ Guess I'll have her change it to Shinko.

Yeah, I thought the previous chapters were good, but this one is worse not the best.

[Amaranth]

But wait, was she the one to approach you and ask you to beta-read her story or what?