Valkyrie
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I hate it when my parents call me down for no reason.
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I wish that my homework completes itself.
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Well, I can't look like a killer. I can't intimidate that way. I don't know if I have an air that says, Don't mess with me'. So I think intimidation won't work for me. For me running is a really good option, especially when my opponents are gangsters. And most of the times, they come in groups of five or six. And my motto when it comes to self-protection is: I will fight only to run away again. My stamina is really good and I know the technique to run away( I am not kidding. There's a technique for running). If you ever played catching with friends where you were being chased by numerous people, you would know how to run away. I am good at vaulting over fences, climbing walls and other stuff as well. I don't get cornered easily and I am quite good at improvising so that I can make my fight a lot easier if I can't run anymore. I guess that what makes me good at running if not for my speed.
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It's better than the one before but I stil got to say that it's lacking in details. It's only talking and talking but no actions and no description. You got to describe alot more than what you did here. Oh yeah, just a little tip: The 's' in the 'She' should be a small 's'. In diaolgue, this is how the sentencing is like. Take it like this, when you end the dialogue, you put a comma right? Normally when you put a comma, the next letter after it is a small letter as well. The only exception is Proper Nouns like names which always start with a capital letter. Some grammar mistakes and word choice could be better. Describe more. All these are really impotant to get right. Those are what makes a good story. A little tip for the next chapter:
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Thanks Bunny-chan! XD Happy New Year to you too! *gives yoghurt*
P.S: Sorry about the yoghurt. I don't have chocolate. XPPPPPP
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Dear Anonymous, Happy New Year. I hope you have a good life wherever you are. You may not want to talk to me anymore but just know I'm here for you. That's what family do. Take care of yourself and hold your head high as you brave the challenges of this new year. You can call me anytime and I will be there to help you anytime. I don't know if you still hate me but if you don't anymore, I hope that we can celebrate this new year under the firework-lit sky together although we might be at different places. Love, ~Rin
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Oh... Alright! La multi ani! I want you to live long as well! Have a good 2012 Nanna-chan!
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*Yawn* A minute to go till 2012...
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Your story is good! I loved it! It's just the tenses, grammar problem. But that didn't stop your story for being good! And I was right! I knew it! Now I'm even more happier.
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Hey Heksu! Hope you have a good year and hope that you will have a good one next year!
It's been great getting to know you! Hope we can talk more next year!
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I wonder who gave me a rep. I can't find where I got it.
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Have a happy new year Nanna-chan! XD
Or should I say:
An Nou Fericit!! XD
P.S: I think that's how you say it... I searhed for it for so long... >.<
