Please tell me what you think of this... I'm writing this letter to the owner of the place where my iPod was stolen...
Dear Sir,
My name is Chelsea ________. I’m fourteen, and I’m writing to tell you that my iPod Touch was stolen at the ________________.
This iPod was two hundred dollars by itself, but also had a case and earphones with it. I worked for over a year to save up money to buy it. It was my dream to get an iPod Touch. I managed to earn enough money and buy it.
On June 22nd, I was getting a haircut and my hair highlighted while my mother was getting a haircut. At first, I put my iPod right in front of me on the counter. Later, it was moved by one of the hair dressers to prevent bleach from getting on it. I looked over to make sure where it was. When my hair was almost finished, I asked my mother if she had it because I didn’t see it in the spot it was before. She hadn’t seen it, and we began to search for it. There was a teacher and two students with us at that time. Most of the students had left already.
While I was getting my hair highlighted, there was only my mother and I right next to each other with a few students attending to my hair. There were no customers near us. There wasn’t time for somebody to steal it unless they were one of the people working on my hair.
My mother was reading a magazine and I was reading a book. We were both distracted. Apparently, my hair dresser didn’t see my iPod where I set it down and the person who moved it was somebody who offered to help with my hair to make the process go faster.
There’s only a few reasons I can think of what happened: One, my iPod was thrown away when the girls were cleaning up. Two, my iPod was stolen by a customer, which I highly doubt as there were none near us. Three, my iPod was stolen by one of the students in your school.
When my mother and I told the teacher and the two students remaining, the teacher told us that this rarely happens. More often during the day, but almost never at night. The students said they were sorry it happened to me and they’ve had problems with stealing before. However, their expressions said ‘here we go again’. The teacher also told us that there were security cameras everywhere. She asked us for our phone number and a description of my iPod. She said in the morning she’d ask if anyone could work the video cameras as the person who usually watches them is on vacation until July 5th.
In the morning, the teacher called. She asked my mother if we had found the iPod. My mother replied ‘no’. Then the teacher informed her that the cameras had apparently not recorded the previous night. It seems strange that the same night the cameras don’t work, my iPod was stolen.
I was hoping that you could possibly replace this iPod. I worked very hard to save up for it, and earned it. Now, I have to do it all over again and it doesn’t seem fair. My iPod had a password on it as well, so the culprit wouldn’t even be able to use it. I also hope that your security cameras will work in the future for customers’ sakes.
I can be contacted at the number of ______________. Thank you.
Sincerely,
Chelsea ________
I blanked out some stuff... Please tell me!! Was it okay?? I don't want to save up for another year...