Kaitou Kid Legendary Thief 197 Report post Posted August 13, 2011 LOL Aeyra.... Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Lia. 45 Report post Posted August 13, 2011 I'm confused. Still, where is my character? Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
IdentityUnknown 216 Report post Posted August 13, 2011 Aeyra stumbled blindly through the smoke, hearing gunshots fire almost right next to her, and panicked, ducking down to the ground, mind whirring. This has to be the fake. In the smoke, there's no way Pyre would fire. She could hit one of us. Aeyra lunged at the silhouette in front of her, feeling the immediate retaliation as she was pressed to the ground. Reacting fast, she whipped to the side, aiming a kick at the fake Pyre, who she could now see through the dissipating fog, was pointing a gun at her. Aeyra's hands were on her gun as well, and she saw everybody frozen in various positions. Chelsea was a few feet behind her, having ducked as well after hearing gunfire. Misaki-chan was on the ground, having just dodged a bullet fired at her. KKLT was helping Lia and Tsukiko away from the building, and Pyre, the real Pyre, now had her gun aimed at her imposter. The atmosphere was boiling over with tension, two guns aimed at the fake, but the imposter was more experienced than them by far. The fake gave a sly cat smile, knowing nobody would harm her while they believed a friend to be threatened. Without shifting her gaze or hand, she said, "This game of charades is over. We have you all trapped. Run, and I shoot. Try and shoot me, I shoot." With her other hand, she took out her phone and dialed a number. "It's over," she declared into it. "We win. Send out the guards." Placing the phone back into her pocket, she examined them all. "You're not bad fighters you know, and you're smart too. We've always been looking for some smart young agents to train, those who could become like me. I'm a valuable agent, indispensable, and I got here very much like you. They wanted to kill me, but I foiled their plans over and over until they offered for me to join. It's not as bad as it seems. All the money, glory you could want. All you need to do is obey," she purred, giving a victorious grin as the guards came out the door. "You'll all have half an hour to make a choice. Have fun in a cell." *reads* *rereads* *rereads* *rereads* ...Wait, who was threatened here? And the threat would've been more effective if she had stated exactly what...yeah, my editor's brain should shut up now. "Tsk..." Pyre clicked her tongue. "You don't have to wait for half an hour. I'll give you a decision now." *BANG*! A shot rang through the air and the fake Pyre fell onto the ground with a shocked look on her face. "No... way..." She tried to lift the gun but before she could, it went limp. A guard had just fired the shot. Everybody turned their head towards the door confused and to their surprise, the guards were actually Monsi, Sayomi and Lia's friend... and one more person... The person who fired the shot. The unknown person pulled off the hood covering the face. Light gradually shone onto that person's face. Everybody's eyes widened in horror. "Hi girls. Missed me?" the unknown person smirked as though everything's already been planned out. Straight away, everyone's gaze turned to Pyre, who seems to be frantically suppressing her grin. "WHAT THE HELL'S GOING ON?!" ----------------------------------- :P :twisted: ... :V Darn it! Now we can't be evil DX!!!! *mehr* ... Whatever, what's been written has been written I guess... @Chelsea- Sure, I was just curious. I just want feedback. I'll write a little... Aeyra stared with her mouth gaping at the dying imposter, this having been the first death she'd actually seen firsthand (and conscious of it...). A pool of blood was forming under her body, the crimson spreading through her clothes, limbs splayed, the light in her eyes starting to fade away. It was worse because she looked exactly like Pyre, and for a moment Aeyra couldn't help but wonder if her presumptions had been wrong, if the one dying was her friend. It wasn't, but she couldn't tear her eyes away. "Aeyra," said KKLT, helping her up to her feet and steadying her as Aeyra wobbled from shock. "You don't have to look if you don't want to." A conversation was starting between the unknown person and Pyre, the real one. The man pulled down his hood and grinned. It was Mark. Everybody (except those who had come with him of course) were surprised, and cautiously welcomed him. "It's only going to be a few moments before real guards come," announced Mark, drawing out his weapon. "The meeting room was about five minutes away. Is everybody ready to run? No stopping if someone gets captured, and don't be afraid to fire back. This is war, and it's their lives or ours." "Ready," they chorused in unison, taking out their guns and sprinting towards where they knew the van to be. It wasn't there. "Oh shit..." muttered Aeyra, hearing footsteps behind them. "They're here! Just make a break for it!" Gunfire ripped through the air, and Aeyra felt a bullet chip her in the leg, causing her to fall. Chelsea and Misaki were also hit, and the guards swarmed them in seconds, dragging them back to the building after quickly disarming them. Looked like they would have to make the choice. ******** I chose us three because we wanted the choice to be evil. No saving us, we'll have fun with double agents of good and evil stuff. *saves anyways* :V And it would've sounded ten times more epic if you added "after all..." at the end. :V Just a suggestion. ------ "Aeyra! Misaki! Chelsea!" IdentityUnknown cried. "Jean, go! We can't go back for them!" Mark urged. She knew he was right. But...how could she? If they weren't killed, at the very least they'd be threatened for information and used. And she hadn't liked the sound of what the fake IdentityUnknown had been saying... "Jean, must I knock you out to make you come with me?" Mark said, exasperated. "C'mon!" IdentityUnknown gritted her teeth, turned, and started running towards the van. Lia, Monsi, Tsukiko, Sayomi, and Wildheart (I'm gonna pencil you in here, still not quite sure exactly where you are) were seated in the van. IdentityUnknown jumped on, then turned towards Mark. "You coming?" His gaze shifted away. "No. I have other business to attend to." IdentityUnknown nodded, then slammed the door shut. She still regretted leaving. ------ Just setting the stage... Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Kaitou Kid Legendary Thief 197 Report post Posted August 13, 2011 I was planning for the person in the hood to be the real pyre and the one with us is mark but I guess this is good too Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
IdentityUnknown 216 Report post Posted August 13, 2011 I was planning for the person in the hood to be the real pyre and the one with us is mark but I guess this is good too You saying that to me or Aeyra? And why in the world would Mark be grinning if I was under the hood? Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Kaitou Kid Legendary Thief 197 Report post Posted August 13, 2011 because he was going to reveal it when we asked? anyways I was just planning for mark to appear either one is good Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
IdentityUnknown 216 Report post Posted August 13, 2011 Alright. \o/ I finished beta-ing Lia's songfic! Now onto Sayomi's fic! Then KtPT's story! And then a really old beta-ing request I received when I used to write for Digimon! ... *facepalms* I can barely bear to read that last one...it's so bad... Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Kaitou Kid Legendary Thief 197 Report post Posted August 13, 2011 Which one? The digimon one? Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
IdentityUnknown 216 Report post Posted August 13, 2011 Yes. It's so horrible. No description at all. Bad sentences. Bad grammar. The guy had someone else edit it last time and didn't even bother to read the notes before posting it online (you can still see the beta's comments). Then he comes up and says, "What happened to helping me edit?" I apologized and told him I'd been busy and seeing as he hadn't contacted me again, had thought he didn't need me as a beta. He never replied to that. I don't think he's really serious about writing. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Kaitou Kid Legendary Thief 197 Report post Posted August 13, 2011 I see. So how is he compared to me? Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
IdentityUnknown 216 Report post Posted August 13, 2011 You >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>> Him That. :V Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Kaitou Kid Legendary Thief 197 Report post Posted August 13, 2011 O__O I guess he's bad then. (since Im not that good. If he's <<<<<<< me , then he must be bad O__O) Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
IdentityUnknown 216 Report post Posted August 13, 2011 Then again, I've never seen your writing before, but judging by what's in DCW IRL, you're MUCH better than him. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Kaitou Kid Legendary Thief 197 Report post Posted August 13, 2011 Thanks XD Hahaha I've never thought that anyone's language skills would be worse than mine Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
IdentityUnknown 216 Report post Posted August 13, 2011 Then you are VERY wrong. *can't stand that kind of bad writing* I can't beta his thing for him without rewriting his entire story for him. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Kaitou Kid Legendary Thief 197 Report post Posted August 13, 2011 THEN IF I WRITE A STORY, WOULD YOU HELP ME WITH IT AS WELL?! XD XD XD XD XD XD XD Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
IdentityUnknown 216 Report post Posted August 13, 2011 Yes. Once I'm done with the ones I have so far and have punched out the next chapter of Taken and sent it to my beta. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Kaitou Kid Legendary Thief 197 Report post Posted August 13, 2011 YAY! XD But I haven't started writing. Maybe Im just afraid to start writing XD I have procrastinated for years already Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
IdentityUnknown 216 Report post Posted August 13, 2011 WRITE WRITE WRITE WRITE WRITE WRITE WRITE WRITE WRITE WRITE WRITE WRITE WRITE WRITE WRITE WRITE WRITE WRITE WRITE WRITE.... Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Kaitou Kid Legendary Thief 197 Report post Posted August 13, 2011 WRITE WRITE WRITE WRITE WRITE WRITE WRITE WRITE WRITE WRITE WRITE WRITE WRITE WRITE WRITE WRITE WRITE WRITE WRITE WRITE.... LOL OMG THAT WAS SCARY! XD XD XD XD XD Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
hopes 237 Report post Posted August 13, 2011 YESSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSS!!!! WE CAN BE EVIL!!!!!!! \o/ Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
IdentityUnknown 216 Report post Posted August 13, 2011 YESSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSS!!!! WE CAN BE EVIL!!!!!!! \o/ NOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!! *goes back and rescues Chelsea* :V @KKLT: It's not scary. :V Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Kaitou Kid Legendary Thief 197 Report post Posted August 13, 2011 Maybe later we'll have two Chelseas, two misakis, two Aeyras... *Imagines* ... O__O Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
IdentityUnknown 216 Report post Posted August 13, 2011 XDXDXD Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Kaitou Kid Legendary Thief 197 Report post Posted August 13, 2011 PIPICHAN. LETS SAVE THEM BEFORE THAT HAPPENS!!!!! :blink: Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
