A Vacation with B.O.

[Rye]

The summer sun shone brightly in the sky as the rental car Mouri Kogoro was driving dashed on the road.

"Beach, swimming pools, spas," said Ran excitedly.

"And so many ladies in bikinis!" exclaimed Kogoro.

Ran pinched his ears. "Dad, behave yourself," scolded Ran.

"Yes, yes," muttered Kogoro.

At last they arrived the resort. A man picked up their luggage and led them to their room.

Near their room, there was an emergency exit.

Just then, Conan heard footsteps on the stairs. He peered inside but saw nobody.

"Strange..." Conan mumbled.

That afternoon....

"Conan-kun, hurry up, we are going to swim now," Ran said as she ran into the pool area.

Conan ran after her, then bumped into a person.

Turns out that person is.... Jodie Starling!

[Aeyra]

Interesting, but it's more than a little bit short. Add more detail and I'm sure it'll become much, much better. 'kay?

[hopes]

Very interesting so far. Might help if it was a bit longer, Nice job! Jodie? Hm... I wonder! Update soon! Arigato~

[Hunter]

Bit short. Somewhat unimpressive. (I'm just noting what I noticed).

Hope you update soon.

Consider my offer.

[SSJBowser]

Not a bad start, should be interesting to see where this goes.