Valkyrie

*throws knife at Kid*

I'm the AWESOME one!!!!

*Paragraphing for every dialogue isn't a strict rule but it shows a good planning of a story.

2. Description~ When you describe something or an action, you have to seperate them using paragraphs. Don't just put every detail together. For one paragraph, describe only one thing/action. It makes it more easier to read.

Hope this helps!

Alright! Let's tackle the first problem, Paragraphing.

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Paragraphing is really important as it shows how well you can co-ordinate the points in your story. You can't squeeze everything into one paragraph nor can you just use too many of them.

Uses of paragraphs

1. Use for dialogue~For every dialogue, there must be a new paragraph. This isn't a strict r...

NOPE! I am awesome! Cindy is awesome as well! Annie-chan's awesome too! You are just weird! XP

LOOL! I am not Rin-sama. Don't call me that. Alright, what do you want to really improve on?

Nope. We (except you) are awesome. The only one who is weird is you. XP

Oh... :| Just practice! It'll be better! I'll help you as well if you want! I guess I'm pretty good in English! *praising self* XP

You're the weird one.... O.o

......................I got a weird Santa for a friend.....................

That's good! It's interesting, you just have to describe and correct the tenses!

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...............I have a machine for a friend.................................

I must be going nuts...

Yeah! XD Anyways, about your story- there's still some problems. You should change it soon.

What are you, a garbage disposal? You can't eat everything!

We'll prepare better for next time! XD Round two is always better!

Happy Birthday! We share the same birthdate! XD Do comeback!

Don't get so happy Kid! We will be back! And the next time, we'll bring bazookas!

Hmmmm.... We should retreat for now. We can't win without her and she will kill us if we did it all alone. XP

No idea. Maybe she got some urgent business.

Cindy-chan's not here.... T.T We lost an important member of our assault team...

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impossible! You're human! You are just as strong as us! And if we can get slashed by a sword, it means you can too!

Nope, you pretty much get everything. XP Let's fight!

KTPT vs. Rin and Cindy will have to wait!!! PAUSE the fight! I'll be right back! Gotta feed the chickens. One of us have to do that! XP