Shinichi Kodou

seriously O-M-G business gurl ... yeah! typing and writing stories are time consuming, yet you discover you havent finished alot. but you are a SHINING STAR in the stories fourm and u have a special writing style i think you will do well in that, to extend the number of pages maybe you have to add more words and discribtive adjectives though its super good the way you usually do it. it makes me imagine the scene in my head while readung your story and u rarely find people like that so u've done a great job so far u just need a little bit of focusing and u will successfully do it! anyway good luck for that and for your shopping and studies hope to read the next chap. soon btw it got me excited, knowing that ur done with more than half of it.. remmeber i'll be waiting for it see ya later i have to study

woow! that means ur too busy these days.. anyway i will still be waiting

wooow! great chapter, yukiko always comes up with unbelieveble ideas! Cant wait to read the next part so please!! quick!

its okayy will still be dying to read it hope u get to post it as soon as possible

NICE CHAPTER! worth all of that waiting i waited for it so impatiently! but poor shiho she must have told shinichi i feel sorry for her T,T anyway... i enjoyed reading it though it was quite short unlike the other chapters... good luck in the next chapter IM WAITING FOR U! FINISH IT!

my god! typing mistake SHINRAN and not SIN sorry for that.. regarding the details issue .. if u are going to add some u will have to actually add alottt like for example if we wanted it a conai story with a happy ending (no tears , no death and such ideas) lets say conan and Ai start getting really close and conan decides to stay a kid and start a new life with Haibara. u have to write alooot abt that.. and Ran's reaction after she knew who conan is .. seeing him with haibara will actually kill her (poor Ran) u see there is alot u cant just add a little and end it .. so after all that i think its perfectly fine the way it is just leave it alone ...besides im waiting for chapter 15 of your pervious fanfic!! speed up, where the heck is it

ok... i should say that's fair enough, no details about poor lovely Ran's broken heart when she realizes shinichi's love to shiho and most importantly when she discovers Conan's real identity.. its somehow CUTE if u imagine Conan and Ai leaning on each other's shoulders. good one ^,^ i love it though i still go for sinRan

as for me.. its: Arabic : its my main language since i come from palestine though i travelled alot and learnt abt many cultures and languages i still used arabic as my main and first language. English : learnt at school since K.G., from reading books watching news in english watching movies and anime sub.ed in english. also, all my uncles studied in london.. my dad travells to USA every 2 , 3 months so.. we use english language most of the time. French: also learning it at school since 1st grade and reading some SHORT stories in french language.. spainish: not really counted as a language i actually started learning spainsh language last year from my frnd (she lived in spain for 11 years) but i suddenly stopped Japanese: first and best source anime and mangaaa!! but my english teacher studied languages major english and minor japanese and German (i think) i used to sit with her and she used to teach me .. now i continued self studying it at home over the internet so..yeah thats how it goes..thats all what i've learnt so far

MY DEAREST SHINICHI DIED :'( :'( :'( RIP GREAT DETECTIVE :( THE WORLDS GONNA MISS U :( well, i must say this was so touching it made me cry :'( i luv u shinichiiii ... the plot is well organized and the style its great u only have some grammatical mistakes in the tenses u should stick to one tense wen writing a story .. if u need any help in that im ready again its a really goood 1