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oi oi, don't be mean to my kaoko~chan! anyways, my turn for a review! ok so bout grammar and stuff, not meaning to be harsh, your tenses kept changing, one moment it was in the past, then the present then the past again... it was a bit confusing... anyways, it was def a good story! i luvs it so much! luckily i was able to choke back the tears... TT.TT or not... also, i think that this would have been a better story if shiho was the one to die off... even if i'm a shiho/ai fan, i really don't think that shinichi should be killed off... i mean, i think more emotions can be portrayed by shiho dying then by shinichi dying since he shows his emotions more than she does... she can act impassive about it and i just dont see her... well.... i just dont see her able to act completely heartbroken and torn up in front of others, and it doesn't really say that shinichi loves her... he never says it, even in the end... its more like a one-sided love story since we never found out whether he really likes her or not >.< it was still really really really good! i luvs you for the story! the hakubaxshiho fic should be done soon! just trying to fix it up since its so hard! i just can't grasp hakuba's personality well!!! anyways, keep writing and i'll keep reading! if you ever want me to edit your grammar and such (i may mess up on spelling, but that's cuz i'm not really going over every little itty bitty detail) but if you ever want it done, just send me the story and i'll fix it up, and possibly add in a few adjectives or something and send it back to you for review! anywas, loved it! thank you kaoko~chan *hugs*