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#21 Miss Smiles

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Posted 06 March 2012 - 01:50 AM

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CHAPTER 4- Chain of events

Into Megure’s car Kogoro and Heiji slammed the door closed; the inspector brought the car alive and drove it to hospital, reached in next fifteen minutes later.

The moment when Megure pull the car to halt in the car park Heiji leapt out without waiting for them, ran forward to the hospital entrance when he saw a familiar long hair flash by; Ran was running in beside him without batting eyebrows in surprise.

They went to reception and Ran immediately asked for Conan’s room and receive answer promptly, Heiji and Ran then broke into run, ran forward to find Kudou Shinichi waiting outside the closing door.

‘Shi-Shinichi?’

He perked his head up when heard name was called.

‘Have we met? Ah, no, we haven’t, I’ve heard of him before. My name is Kaitou Kuroba. I saved the child; Conan is now with the doctor.’

‘You look like Shinichi,’ stated Ran, stared at Kuroba in surprise.

‘I don’t believe now it’s our first time we meet,’ Heiji said suspiciously.

‘Is it? I get it often I look like one of the actors, or handsome guy girls met, they often ask me why I’m born with good looks,’ Kuroba laughed, and Heiji noticed his laughter was meek, covered with nervousness.

‘Very funny, I swear now I have a witness who can lead me ter Kaitou Kid…’ Heiji smirked.

‘Is it? You have to introduce him to me one day,’ Kuroba said, interested as he told calmly. ‘But don’t you have questions for me about the accident?’

‘A lot of questions, yesh, I have tons.’ Heiji replied. ‘I hope you can withstand me as its interrogation. I’m a detective.’

‘Sure.’ Kuroba looked less cheery when he watched Heiji. ‘What’s your name?’

‘Take a guess. I’m one of ter famous detective in Japan. Let’s start wiv questions.’

‘Is Conan alright?’ Ran’s question followed his sentence as she looked at Kuroba anxiously. Kuroba nodded.

‘It was me cover in blood, not Conan’s, I was hit by side with Conan in my arms before we fall to the ground. We both were hit, but mine isn’t serious enough to lie on hospital bed. I think Conan has hit his head when we were knocked down.’

Kuroba explained, and Heiji turned his head to hear from him when he spoke, narrowed his eyes together.

‘Where ‘ere yer when you witness the accident?’

‘I was behind the child, I saw Conan running past me, it was the moment I hear a screech and realize the car was heading to us. Later I notice it did not head to me, but Conan. You can ask the drunk when he’s sober. He’s also in hospital.’

‘You don’t hav to worry about this part, leave t’is to me. How is yer injury?’ Heiji asked.

Kuroba pulled up his sleeves, revealed a bandage around his arm, a clean bandage was wrapped around middle upper arm and down to lower, towards the middle where the clip attached together.

‘Its minor abrasion, don’t make fuss about it.’

At this moment the doctor came out from hospital room, Ran noticed him and approached.

‘How is he?’

‘He has to stay overnight in hospital, we have to observe his condition. As for rest of it, he’s alright. Now he was sleeping, you have to wait until he wake up, but you can visit.’

After the doctor said good news Ran, Heiji and Kuroba came into hospital room, Ran smiled in relief as she sat beside the bed. She gently held his hand.

Kogoro came in, found them gathering around Conan, he also noticed their expression, sighed before he smiled when he watched Ran was beside the child.

‘The doctor says he’s alright?’ Kogoro guessed, and they nodded as answer.

‘Kid, get well soon,’ he patted Conan’s covered feet.

Megure came in, but he suddenly halt to his tracks before he walked backwards, Miwako appeared and had his ear cover in whisper, curiosity intensified in the room as Kuroba, Heiji and Kogoro exchanging glances.

‘That snob is so annoying. We might as well put him in jail overnight,’ said Megure.

‘What is it? Megure,’ Kogoro called.

‘His parents hired a lawyer. He won’t say anything until the lawyer comes.’

‘He still won’t admit what he did wrong? That guy deserved to put in jail for a long time. And I’m going t’ere to giv deduction for my showdown,’ Heiji put down his verdict as he pointed himself. ‘No one will hear wrong from me personally.’

‘You have the evidence? And why don’t I know about it?’ Megure narrowed his eyes at them. ‘If you know something, you also have to tell me what you know.’

‘You will know in good time,’ Heiji smirked. ‘You won’t be lef’ out, Megure keibu becos ter guy won’t go anywhere even with lawyer.’

‘At least you’re not pain in the neck like new detective I’ve met long ago.’

‘I’m not that entirely bad, seriously. We have worked together in ter past before. Take us there, Megure. I’m not having snob you refer to scot-free, in Japan and on earth.’
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Posted 06 March 2012 - 03:00 AM

lol nice new chapter XDD hm? is the lawyer ERI? if it was it'd be alot mote entertaing
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Posted 06 March 2012 - 03:06 AM

You read more and find out! :mrgreen:
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Posted 07 March 2012 - 05:50 PM

oh! poet. dreams updated MANIPULATION
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Posted 07 March 2012 - 10:20 PM

Ahhh, next one is final chapter! I'm so excited!
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Posted 07 March 2012 - 11:51 PM

Ahhh, next one is final chapter! I'm so excited!

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Posted 08 March 2012 - 03:08 AM

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Posted 08 March 2012 - 02:28 PM

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Posted 09 March 2012 - 12:03 AM

yeah.... *sad*
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Posted 18 March 2012 - 11:46 AM

These stories are just too awesome! I'm still working on mine. I should left in chapters instead XD Because my story is about the size of a real book. Well, a children's book of 26 pages XD
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Posted 19 March 2012 - 09:30 AM

26 pages? I think yours can go over 50. I like to organize the structure, it's fun. :smile: I like your story, and I think it has potential to be novel. I like writing stories. :)
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Posted 19 March 2012 - 10:49 AM

This story is great!!!
Can't wait for the next chapter... ^_^
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Posted 19 March 2012 - 11:11 AM

Thank you!! I've send next to beta, I have to wait for it. :)
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Posted 20 March 2012 - 02:19 AM

(remove for revision. See the next update)
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Posted 25 March 2012 - 01:55 PM

i'm confused now
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Posted 26 March 2012 - 01:03 AM

Im confused about the fifth chptr. But before that i was like... AAAAH!!! I love it!! XD

If I save you then you will be saved but if I don't save you you will not be saved but the world will still go on therefore saving you is not significant however due to the fact I can't read people's minds or predict what they will do unless I have some clue or psychic powers hence regardless of whether I save you or not I don't know if the next person will be kind enough as such but if by some action of mine you survive no matter how severe the injuries you will still be alive therefore I will have saved you. If fate predicts everything then fate can also predict the changes that will be made in it but they won't be changes as they will have been predicted. But it seems you will be far from saved by the time I finished writing this. Since it is apparently up to me I save you. Though this you can be anyone as I have not specified and/or can be negating the fact I have to save the person above me.


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Posted 26 March 2012 - 01:49 AM

*blink* maybe my writer's block wasn't fully cured. *smack my own head* I'm out of ideas after I got Conan rescued. I have original plan is to let him say deduction straightaway, but I did let friend help me edit but time clash so I'm stuck at chapter 5. You both find chapter 5 incomplete? ???
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Posted 26 March 2012 - 04:58 AM

The chapter remove for revision. There will be no need for story deletion, fifth chapter will be rewritten.
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Posted 28 March 2012 - 01:22 AM

poet it's me aoko. sorry. i lost the password to my old account so i made this one. i got a new tower to this computer and had to reinstall everything and went to sign on...i lost the paper
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SORRY GUYS!! IT'S AOKO I HAD TO MAKE A NEW ACCOUNT!! i lost the password to my old one ;.;

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Posted 28 March 2012 - 02:53 AM

It's okay, you can ask Maurice regarding your account, he can help you reset.
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